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Coffee Adventure [Aug. 20th, 2007|02:53 pm]
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[dreamisle]
Hello guys and gals. I'm working on an adventure game about being a barista, and I was hoping for some feedback. You can find it at http://thegriddle.net/python/ in a few different mediums including the full source. It's a playable beta version - a lot of the systems are all done being implemented, I just need to write the story for it. I would love any comments and suggestions you all have, especially as far as the story and writing style go. Let me know what you think!

Dave M.
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[User Picture]From: rami_raksab
2007-08-20 11:59 pm (UTC)
I took a quick glance at it. It's got a number of typos and the language is a bit crude ... I'm sure you were going for the latter effect on purpose, but probably not the former. I'm not really into games of this style, but it seems to be a functional game so far.
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[User Picture]From: dreamisle
2007-08-21 12:22 am (UTC)
Hmm. I've been going through and looking for typos - I'll get rid of nay I find. As for the crude parts, aside from the dialog, can you give me any specific parts you thought needed to be cleaned up?
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